If you drop "That" in the last line, the rhythm will match

Thank you Anon!

sorry to trouble you again..

losing the "but" will bring balance of harmony

(something I keep telling my wife)

even the "it" could go too

Ooh thank you Anon, sounds like good advice but I can't decide - I'd better sleep on it. The land of nod is calling me.

Try it without the "but"

Leave the "it"

Or.. if yer goin down Ireland way, to a little town dey name these saucy poems after

you'll be wantin it ta flow across the tongue like a fine Irish whiskey

or the first kiss of a sweet lass

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There once was a man named Bob,
Lost his finger in a pigeon's gob,
Instead of feeling sad,
He said he was glad,
He hadn't fed it with his nob.

Thank you Anon, I can see how it flows better now. I'd better keep off the whiskey though or I'll be back in the land of nod.

see? anons can't be all bad

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