Now I'm conflicted, concerned that "the wording stuff" will take my focus away from my patients. Can anybody clear this up definitively? I'm now wondering if I should drop the "Dave" reference because it might lengthen it too much...and "Dave" also cues that "the fall is coming." Don't want THAT. New topic: I pushed (and capitalized) the phrases "just how insignificant" to lead the reader to want to finish that almost cliche-phrase...("JUST HOW INSIGNIFICANT we are")....so I could take it in another direction. That's why I put THAT phrase in all caps instead of YOU (which anon CAPATLIZED, and there's nothing inaccurate about that). It's just that leaning on the YOU could seem a bit harsh compared with the original was more a gentle moment of realization. Help! My patients deserve my Undistracted care! .
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I clarified that singular/plural thing. And, um...she's speaking...to Dave!...Thanks.
1:54pm
I read it more as "Moments like this remind me of just how insignificant...YOU are."
2:09pm
Now I'm conflicted, concerned that "the wording stuff" will take my focus away from my patients. Can anybody clear this up definitively? I'm now wondering if I should drop the "Dave" reference because it might lengthen it too much...and "Dave" also cues that "the fall is coming." Don't want THAT. New topic: I pushed (and capitalized) the phrases "just how insignificant" to lead the reader to want to finish that almost cliche-phrase...("JUST HOW INSIGNIFICANT we are")....so I could take it in another direction. That's why I put THAT phrase in all caps instead of YOU (which anon CAPATLIZED, and there's nothing inaccurate about that). It's just that leaning on the YOU could seem a bit harsh compared with the original was more a gentle moment of realization. Help! My patients deserve my Undistracted care! .
3:18pm
"Moments like this remind me of just how insignificant you are, WHO ARE YOU AGAIN?"
Although what you did first works as it's like a run up to an insignificant anticlimax
"Moments like this remind me of JUST HOW INSIGNIFICANT you are"
3:28pm
You may not want to edit again, Cap Auth, but I'd suggest keep it subtle and let the reader do the work.
6:09pm